### Example: **Student Submission**: *Essay Prompt*: Governments should take more responsibility to ensure that their citizens have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree? *Student Essay*: “` [Student's essay text goes here] “` **Evaluation and Feedback**: — “`html IELTS Writing Task 2 Evaluation IELTS Writing Task 2 Evaluation Task Response Score: 7 Strengths The essay addresses the question directly, providing a clear stance. The introduction outlines the importance of both approaches and provides a clear thesis. Weaknesses The arguments could benefit from more specific examples to illustrate the points made. The essay partially discusses both sides but leans heavily on one without fully exploring the counterargument in the provided paragraphs. Coherence and Cohesion Score: 6 Strengths The essay follows a logical structure with a clear introduction and first body paragraph. Cohesive devices are used effectively to connect ideas. Weaknesses Some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Repetition of certain phrases and ideas can make the essay less engaging. Lexical Resource Score: 6 Strengths The vocabulary used is generally appropriate for the topic. Key terms related to climate change and government regulations are correctly used. Weaknesses There is noticeable repetition of certain words and phrases. Some word choices are awkward and affect the clarity of the message. Grammatical Range and Accuracy Score: 6 Strengths The essay demonstrates an attempt to use a variety of sentence structures. Basic grammar is mostly accurate, with some complex sentences attempted. Weaknesses Frequent grammatical errors, especially in subject-verb agreement and article usage. Punctuation errors are common and affect readability. Detailed Analysis of Grammatical Errors Sentence Excerpt with Error Identified Error Type of Error Corrected Sentence (Enhanced) "many people claim that it is the governments’ mission" Incorrect possessive; should be "government's". Possessive form "many people claim that it is the government's mission." "enforcing residents to change their consuming habits" Incorrect gerund form; should be "consumption habits". Gerund form "rather than requiring residents to change their consumption habits." "people tend to comply with the law than sacrificing personal gain" Incorrect comparative; should be "rather than sacrifice personal gain". Comparative form "people tend to comply with the law rather than sacrifice personal gain." Overall Feedback Overall Band Score: 6 The essay effectively addresses the prompt by providing a clear stance on government regulations versus individual actions in combating climate change. The introduction is well-structured, and the main idea is clear. However, there are several areas that need improvement: Recommendations for Improvement Task Response: Provide more specific examples and detailed evidence to support the arguments. Ensure that the counterargument is fully explored to strengthen the essay. Coherence and Cohesion: Improve transitions between paragraphs to ensure a smoother flow of ideas. Use a variety of cohesive devices to avoid repetition and maintain reader interest. Lexical Resource: Incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary and topic-specific terms. Avoid repetition by using synonyms and varied expressions. Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Review basic grammar rules such as subject-verb agreement and article usage. Practice writing complex sentences to improve grammatical range. Pay attention to punctuation to enhance readability. “` ### Notes: – Ensure the evaluation is strict and aligns with the provided IELTS criteria. – Maintain a formal and detailed tone throughout the feedback. – Use icons and emoticons to make the feedback more engaging and visually appealing.